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A few comments: * The core idea sounds interesting. Make it the first paragraph, not paragraph seven. * Spend more words describing what makes Oak different.
by noelwelsh 4mo ago
A few comments:
* The core idea sounds interesting. Make it the first paragraph, not paragraph seven.
* Spend more words describing what makes Oak different.
* "I built a version control system in my free-time called Jam". You probably didn't name your free time. "I built a version control system, called Jam, in my free time."
- philipwhiuk 4mo ago"I built a version control system, in my free-time, called Jam" is fine.
- stonogo 4mo agoIt's also fine without the commas, because nobody was confused by that structure.
- pepa65 4mo agoWithout comma's it might require a re-parse.
- AdamN 4mo agoJust "I built a version control system called Jam". The free-time thing is good for a history page but the homepage needs to tell the important part (you've got history and expertise in this subject) and then move onto what the vision is for Oak and what kind of help you need.