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Exactly why I offer a better approach. ;)

• pjc50 2y ago
  You're arguing that your approach is "better", but for OP the criticism is the point. And you're coming across as incredibly smug about it.
• Dylan16807 2y ago
  Your "better" approach still throws out two thirds of my original comment. I'm not convinced. Also I don't think the article covers the groundwork well enough to make the perspective interesting. Interesting is where it could get with further work, not where it is now.
  • schiffern 2y ago
    I gave you an example, but you're right that I didn't do all the copyediting work for you. It's up to you to generalize the example to the rest of your post. Good luck! Any questions please don't hesitate to ask. Good thread, thanks and cheers
    • Dylan16807 2y ago
      ...I gave the same example when I originally asked you the question. It's obvious how to change that sentence. Changing the rest is not obvious. ""If you cut my comment down to "This touches on fundamental philosophy." you could turn it into minor praise but you'd have to throw out the rest.""
      • schiffern 2y ago
        >It's obvious how to change that sentence. Changing the rest is not obvious. Good question. First, I would ask yourself, "would the rest of the writing really need to be changed?" If they're not making negative value judgements against the original work, then I would say they fall outside of the feedback I offered.
        • Dylan16807 2y ago
          Well my personal view is that it is making a negative value judgement against the original work and that it does not really need to be changed. But your suggestion of a "trivial" way to change it got me curious.