I think you really had a good piece of feedback going until you made it personal in the last paragraph. It does not endear you to the reader and from an intelle

I think you really had a good piece of feedback going until you made it personal in the last paragraph. It does not endear you to the reader and from an intellectual perspective I don't understand why you'd finish an otherwise well-structured response like that. If it was out of anger, I would expect it in the front. Can you explain what made you write it like this?