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The argument would be more compelling from a more compelling writer. The second sentence, "It’s one of the pieces of advice that I have always completely disreg
by putzdown 11y ago
The argument would be more compelling from a more compelling writer. The second sentence, "It’s one of the pieces of advice that I have always completely disregarded, as being obviously wrong..." contains a comma that hasn't appealed to the English eye since Jane Austen and is in any case unnecessary. Physician, heal thyself.
- insickness 11y agoThe next sentence should lose the comma as well. "A sentence that is long can still be quite simple, if it doesn’t require the reader to remember previous parts of the sentence in order to parse the rest." It's almost as if he's using unnecessary commas to make up for the long sentence.
- JustSomeNobody 11y agoThe pause from the comma makes the sentence come off a bit condescending. I felt like I was being talked down to.