1. Your sentences are too vague. From what I'm reading, could be anything from a Forum to a Job site. 2. No HTTPS. 3. The email field does not look like one.

1. Your sentences are too vague. From what I'm reading, could be anything from a Forum to a Job site. 2. No HTTPS. 3. The email field does not look like one. 4. Instead of creating buzz with things like "coming soon", "almost here", "change is coming", you mention that you would launch in Fall 2015. Nobody wants to sign up for service 3-4 months in advance, especially when it's hard to tell what it is. 5. Description paragraph is way too long. I'd also advice you to spend 10 extra minutes and put mixpanel on your page. You would know exactly what's turning people off.