This indeed is a fine critique here. Thanks for your points. Actually this story was written some time back and I pulled it out of my backups just in the hope o

This indeed is a fine critique here. Thanks for your points. Actually this story was written some time back and I pulled it out of my backups just in the hope of getting something out of it. To tell the truth I could have done better if I would have written it now. But I would have indeed retained some of those mistakes you pointed out. I would make it a point not to repeat it the next time.