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This looks really compelling. The home page is nicely designed -- but I have some constructive feedback on the copy, which is understandable but clearly not wri
by chrisweekly 12y ago
This looks really compelling. The home page is nicely designed -- but I have some constructive feedback on the copy, which is understandable but clearly not written by a native English speaker.
"Development and deployment never been so simple"
The grammar error here is a little jarring to native English speakers, and it's particularly noticeable because it's in the tagline. Fixing that would make a better first impression.
"Development and deployment have never been so simple" would work better, IMHO. Or perhaps you'd prefer
"Development and deployment made simple", in keeping with the terse / minimalist theme.
While I'm at it, a few other minor corrections, in roughly decreasing importance the further down the page we go:
"GitHub and BitBucket integrations allows you automate DevOps."
should be
"GitHub and BitBucket integrations allow you to automate DevOps."
"Servers and Clouds linking"
should probably be
"Link Servers and Clouds"
for verb consistency with previous headings;
"Create... Build... Link... Manage... " is consistent, whereas
"Create... Build... ..Linking... Manage..." is not.
"You can link your server to Last.Backend with special command. Just copy it and execute in a terminal."
could be
"You can link your server to Last.Backend with a special command. Just copy it and execute it in a terminal."
Finally,
"Just look at scheme and you can see what's going on. Color element indication provide all information about all warning and problems. Logs output gives you ability to know much more."
could be improved as
"Just look at the scheme to see what's going on. Colored elements convey information about warnings and problems at a glance. Log output provides the ability to know much more."
(or similar)
HTH! :)
- lastbackend 12y agoWOW! That's amazing! We'll correct it in few minutes!! Thx a lot. Please contact us. I have some offer for you :)
- rentnorove 12y agoAlong the same lines, "How it works?" isn't quite right. Should probably be "How does it work?".
- lastbackend 12y agoAgree! Done!
- pgt 12y agoHaha, "I have some offer for you!" Awesome. Where are you guys based, @lastbackend?
- lastbackend 12y agoOur team is distributed around the world :) We are everywhere and looking for talented developers and other talented guys.
- loceng 12y agoYour designer(s) are prime.
- lastbackend 12y agoDone!
- sly010 12y ago"Please make us create an useful tool for us - Developers." could be Please help us create a useful tool for developers.
- lastbackend 12y agoFixed! Thank you! :)
- loceng 12y agoPerhaps "You can link your server to Last.Backend with a special command - just copy it and execute it in a terminal." would work better; notice the "-" which will signify that it's a continued part of the thought.