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Let me be blunt; (to preface, this is entirely a comment on my own shortfallings and not a disagreement with your statement) I didn't have such a painful read

Let me be blunt; (to preface, this is entirely a comment on my own shortfallings and not a disagreement with your statement) I didn't have such a painful read of it as you seem to imply. Would you have examples of similar responses which are considered of much higher quality? (I assume the PG essays, but they are a different beast.) I'd be very interested in using this as a vector to learn from someone else's mistakes, given that I find myself unable to notice them on my own.

michaelochurch 12y ago
He doesn't know where to use commas and how to make his sentences flow. Too many of them are unnecessarily run-ons. (Long sentences are sometimes exactly what you want, but there's an art to it.) He has some fragments and, while sentence fragments are sometimes great, he doesn't have the subtlety to use them properly. (Most people don't; in that case, stick to full sentences.) He screws up on punctuation all over the place and uses abbreviations like "am" for "morning". This is fine if you're texting, but he's not. There's a general lack of clarity and professionalism in his writing. He doesn't respect others in the conversation enough to give them his full attention. Get him to talk about himself, and he'll go on and on and run over any obstacle (proper grammar, good taste) but expect him to express a thought clearly and it won't happen.