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Good for you, you're putting yourself out there. And this work isn't for nothing. But man, look at how many times you used the word 'I'. If you want people to

Good for you, you're putting yourself out there. And this work isn't for nothing. But man, look at how many times you used the word 'I'. If you want people to take away something from your story, make your story about what needs to be taken away. Not about you. Keep writing.

markveronda 12y ago
Didn't even pick up on that first time though, but then ran a control+f to see and it is indeed used a lot. However, the story is self-reflective on the author's own past and I personally did take away some nice points from the post.
justinpombrio 12y ago
This is the story of the author trying to decide what to be when he grows up -- of course it uses the word "I" a lot. Perhaps you're suggesting that he tell a different story, though personally I like this one.
Animats 12y ago
Agreed. This is really an ad for the author's company.
- jtheory 12y ago
  Really? I had little idea of what the company was before reading this, and I still have little idea, afterwards. Still, interesting read, and it's really cementing in my mind a bit more where I want to take my own work & life. Side q for lux - maybe it's early days to say, but I'm curious to see how well you manage to shape your company into what you want it to be; e.g., keep re-asking these questions (am I making a positive difference in the world?) and see how the answers are trending. Good luck!
  - lux 12y ago
    Thanks! We're still a 3-person company, so it's a bit early to tell, but it's something we talk about a lot amongst ourselves, as well as with other business owners we know, and something I'm always reading about online. We've all worked at places that had particularly toxic company cultures, so we spent a lot of time just working to make sure we weren't bringing unhealthy habits into this new business. I can definitely say my level of stress and tension are much different 6 months in than when we started, despite things being way more hectic and challenging now vs then.
lux 12y ago
Haha thanks. I noticed this myself after writing it, but wasn't sure how to phrase a lot of it clearly without starting with "I". My girlfriend helped edit and removed a bunch of "So"s from the starts of sentences, which I think was my way of trying to not start with "I" quite so much :P

markveronda 12y ago

Didn't even pick up on that first time though, but then ran a control+f to see and it is indeed used a lot. However, the story is self-reflective on the author's own past and I personally did take away some nice points from the post.

justinpombrio 12y ago

This is the story of the author trying to decide what to be when he grows up -- of course it uses the word "I" a lot. Perhaps you're suggesting that he tell a different story, though personally I like this one.

Animats 12y ago

Agreed. This is really an ad for the author's company.

jtheory 12y ago
Really? I had little idea of what the company was before reading this, and I still have little idea, afterwards. Still, interesting read, and it's really cementing in my mind a bit more where I want to take my own work & life. Side q for lux - maybe it's early days to say, but I'm curious to see how well you manage to shape your company into what you want it to be; e.g., keep re-asking these questions (am I making a positive difference in the world?) and see how the answers are trending. Good luck!
- lux 12y ago
  Thanks! We're still a 3-person company, so it's a bit early to tell, but it's something we talk about a lot amongst ourselves, as well as with other business owners we know, and something I'm always reading about online. We've all worked at places that had particularly toxic company cultures, so we spent a lot of time just working to make sure we weren't bringing unhealthy habits into this new business. I can definitely say my level of stress and tension are much different 6 months in than when we started, despite things being way more hectic and challenging now vs then.

lux 12y ago

Haha thanks. I noticed this myself after writing it, but wasn't sure how to phrase a lot of it clearly without starting with "I". My girlfriend helped edit and removed a bunch of "So"s from the starts of sentences, which I think was my way of trying to not start with "I" quite so much :P