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Not trying to disparage the achievement of the founders, but the writing and the language are horrendous. It's almost like reading Dilbert's Mission Statement
by jevgeni 12y ago
Not trying to disparage the achievement of the founders, but the writing and the language are horrendous.
It's almost like reading Dilbert's Mission Statement Generator for several pages.
For example:
> Diving right in, Julia took charge of marketing, customer service and finance, while Kevin managed product development end-to-end. Together, they created an extremely tight feedback loop that empowered customers to rapidly influence the service. And when it came to finding these customers, they turned first to their own backyard.
Yes, OK, but what did they actually do? And how? This has no content. The first 1/3 of the article is supposedly about the early hardship of a startup. Could anyone extract any useful, actionable information from that part? Something that you could actually downright do, to help your venture? I sure couldn't. And don't even get me started on "future-cast"...
- leoedin 12y agoOne of them built the product, one of them marketed it... I think that's the same situation as every small startup. What made them succesful was probably a mixture of hard work, capable founders and a huge dose of luck.
- jevgeni 12y ago> What made them succesful was probably a mixture of hard work, capable founders and a huge dose of luck. Exactly. You were able to fit into one sentence a whole paragraph of the original article. This is why I think your sentence is far superior writing.