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I agree with jakecarpenter, leave out the URL plug - interested parties can Google. I'd also drop the "Briefly," from the front end, it weakens the whole phras
by TheJester 17y ago
I agree with jakecarpenter, leave out the URL plug - interested parties can Google. I'd also drop the "Briefly," from the front end, it weakens the whole phrase. The actual length of the pitch speaks for its own brevity.
- patio11 17y agointerested parties can Google. Interested parties have better things to do with their time than fix the bugs you introduced into your own elevator pitch. Lack of a prominent call to action is a bug, not a feature. Give them a link front and center. (I would personally link to a specially prepared landing page, not the front page. If they've demonstrated enough interest to click then they just might be interested in stepping through a brief guided tour.)