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Show HN: I used Squarespace to build a site for my new game. Very pleased

7 points by lenkendall 12y ago

lenkendall 12y ago
I would love feedback on the copy.
- mjhouse 12y ago
  On the site? It looks good. You might consider adding an option to share the site via social at the bottom. It might drive more traffic to the site. Also- icantthinkofone is right. You probably want a game info page with screenshots, video or a guide, you know.
  - lenkendall 12y ago
    Not sure how I forgot this. #Facepalm
    - mjhouse 12y ago
      You get distracted lining up <div> tags. :)
bttf 12y ago
In my opinion, this site is lacking a solid demonstration of the game/product. My interest has been piqued but the website fails to inform.
- deleted 12y ago
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- lenkendall 12y ago
  Thanks for this. I just completed my Kickstarter and the product is in print. I'm going to add a video to the home page once I have the physical product ready. Here's the old video. Does that help clarify a bit? https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/LenKendall/cartegram-find-your-adventure https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/LenKendall/cartegram-fi...
icantthinkofone 12y ago
My only complaint is that these sites all look the same.
- lenkendall 12y ago
  That's fair, but in my eyes every bootstrap site looks the same too. I think the photography is the key to standing out.
  - icantthinkofone 12y ago
    Any time you use someone else's framework you're going to look the same. Photography will make you a bettter, or worse, version of the same thing but you'll still look the same. Which is why my web dev company would never consider using such things.
christudor 12y ago
For me, the big problem here is that the website gives me no indication of what the game actually is. I understand it involves my smartphone and photographing things in the real world, but that's about it. However, when I go to the Kickstarter page I see you've got this wonderful video which explains /exactly/ what the game involves, and it actually looks pretty cool. So I would say get some more information about the game on the website (I would start by adding the Kickstarter video to the front page). Great idea, though - good luck with the launch of the first season!
- lenkendall 12y ago
  Thanks Chris. I think you're right about this. The video is way more clear and I need to re-edit it to be timeless and not reference the KS campaign.
  - christudor 12y ago
    Yep, I think when people are introduced to a new product they're just used to clicking on a video and having everything explained to them in 2-3 minutes. The video on the KS page looks great, as I said...
lenkendall 12y ago
I added a temporary video in per the suggestion of a few of you guys. It will be a placeholder until I reshoot something a bit more polished. Thanks again!

7 points by lenkendall 12y ago

lenkendall 12y ago

I would love feedback on the copy.

mjhouse 12y ago
On the site? It looks good. You might consider adding an option to share the site via social at the bottom. It might drive more traffic to the site. Also- icantthinkofone is right. You probably want a game info page with screenshots, video or a guide, you know.
- lenkendall 12y ago
  Not sure how I forgot this. #Facepalm
  - mjhouse 12y ago
    You get distracted lining up <div> tags. :)

bttf 12y ago

In my opinion, this site is lacking a solid demonstration of the game/product. My interest has been piqued but the website fails to inform.

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lenkendall 12y ago
Thanks for this. I just completed my Kickstarter and the product is in print. I'm going to add a video to the home page once I have the physical product ready. Here's the old video. Does that help clarify a bit? https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/LenKendall/cartegram-find-your-adventure https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/LenKendall/cartegram-fi...

icantthinkofone 12y ago

My only complaint is that these sites all look the same.

lenkendall 12y ago
That's fair, but in my eyes every bootstrap site looks the same too. I think the photography is the key to standing out.
- icantthinkofone 12y ago
  Any time you use someone else's framework you're going to look the same. Photography will make you a bettter, or worse, version of the same thing but you'll still look the same. Which is why my web dev company would never consider using such things.

christudor 12y ago

For me, the big problem here is that the website gives me no indication of what the game actually is. I understand it involves my smartphone and photographing things in the real world, but that's about it. However, when I go to the Kickstarter page I see you've got this wonderful video which explains /exactly/ what the game involves, and it actually looks pretty cool. So I would say get some more information about the game on the website (I would start by adding the Kickstarter video to the front page). Great idea, though - good luck with the launch of the first season!

lenkendall 12y ago
Thanks Chris. I think you're right about this. The video is way more clear and I need to re-edit it to be timeless and not reference the KS campaign.
- christudor 12y ago
  Yep, I think when people are introduced to a new product they're just used to clicking on a video and having everything explained to them in 2-3 minutes. The video on the KS page looks great, as I said...

lenkendall 12y ago

I added a temporary video in per the suggestion of a few of you guys. It will be a placeholder until I reshoot something a bit more polished. Thanks again!