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Thanks for your comment. What I'm suggesting is that for some people being an active part of shaping the strategic direction of a business as well as its produ

Thanks for your comment. What I'm suggesting is that for some people being an active part of shaping the strategic direction of a business as well as its products is an attractive thing. Not sure what the mechanical errors are but grateful if you can help point them out!

jwise0 12y ago
Aha, that makes more sense! You might want to clarify that some when you initially introduce the message; I think that point is kind of 'hiding' behind some of the other ideas in your post. It looks like you fixed one of the more glaring things since I last reloaded (the 'laser quest' duplicate); I'd suggest doing a pass for punctuation, too (a bunch of sentences would scan quite a lot better with commas throughout -- "Plus, if ... fund, then ..." is one of the examples of that class that might go a long way towards setting the stage better to make your point).
- steffanaquarone 12y ago
  Thanks - noted / done