Ben, this is a very well written PR (even if you copied the style) and I think you should go ahead and publish it (I personally feels most of the Press releases

Ben, this is a very well written PR (even if you copied the style) and I think you should go ahead and publish it (I personally feels most of the Press releases are not worth it but yours looks to be something which can be published). Can you check at fiverr.com and oDesk.com, I know there are some really good people there (you need to some searching though) who can make it better, I had done some PR work myself (syndication) so feel free to contact me via http://www.inboundio.com/contact_us http://www.inboundio.com/contact_us if you need any help or guidance.