I don't really have any experience in this either, but I can offer some help with grammar / minor details: > $20,000 investment -- if you're sending this anywh

I don't really have any experience in this either, but I can offer some help with grammar / minor details: > $20,000 investment -- if you're sending this anywhere outside the US, remember to change the currency or specify USD. > pbx should be capitalized (PBX) since it's an acronym. If there's a chance your readers don't know what PBX stands for, you may want to say it is as well. > In case this doesn't format properly, the s tags are strikeouts and [[brackets]] are my additions: "OfficeZilla allows private and shared calendars, contacts, forums, knowledge <s>base</s> [[bases]], <s>email</s> [[emails]], chat <s>room</s> [[rooms]], phone message <s>pad</s> [[pads]], project <s>manager</s> [[managers]], to-do lists, and <s>url</s> [[URL]] sharing. OfficeZilla has no usage limits <s>including</s> on the number of users, files, or mail." > "OfficeZilla is translated into Dutch, English, Finnish, French, German, Hebrew, Italian, Japanese, Korean, Portuguese, and Spanish[[.]]" OfficeZilla accounts include non-profit organizations, medical offices, legal offices, realty offices, title companies, planned communities, network marketers, schools, along with other groups, companies, and organizations. > "Create partnerships with realty franchisors <s>with a particular focus</s>[[, focusing first]] on EXIT Realty <s>who</s>[[, which]] has the most realty agents & offices already using the system" > OfficeZilla 6 Month Plan: Shouldn't the stuff under this be bulleted as well? > "OfficeZilla[[,]] as it is[[,]] will remain free, attracting between 15 and 30 new signups a day representing hundreds of additional potential users[[. Each account holder may also]] <s>and the potential that the account holder will</s> want to upgrade to a customized system or add modules for a fee. Continuing [[to sign]] <s>signing</s> up free customers is a priority[[.]] <s>having a</s>[[A]] solid free system equals free marketing and <s>allows</s> goodwill <s>to be developed</s>." > "In order to drive each system deep, there will be one new developer, one technical support person, and one salesperson hired for each system" -- I don't really understand what you're trying to say here, but I'm sleepy and it could just be me.