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I agree, I'm not sure what relevance the girl's weight had to the paragraph.
by sivetic 13y ago
I agree, I'm not sure what relevance the girl's weight had to the paragraph.
- andyjohnson0 13y agoThe author says they were in the snack aisle and she was "begging for cookies". I read the reference to her weight as a clumsy way of implying that the girl's parents were giving in to her demands instead of teaching her what the snacks cost. As a hook for the article I thought it was clumsy and unnecessary.
- dalke 13y agoIt's even more odd juxtaposed with the "a blue-collar type." I think it's reasonable to say that this introduction suggests a middle class snobbishness towards the lower class. The worry is that by not teaching the kids correctly, the kids will end up in the lower class. On the other side, it's also teaching people that they shouldn't want to be in the upper class, because then they would lose this important sense of money.
- yummyfajitas 13y agoThe hairiness of a hobbit's foot, his lack of shoes, the bright colors he wears and the pipe-weed he smokes are not very relevant to the War of the Ring. But mentioning it in the very beginning certainly helps to set the scene.
- tptacek 13y agoDon't be obtuse. What color was her hair? How tall was she? What was she wearing? None of that detail is present. This isn't scene-setting. It's a subtextual comment, and it's a clumsy and ignorant one. That's what bothered me about it: it's just bad writing. We get it, we get it: the author thinks lower-middle class families raise fat kids on junk food. Aha! There's one now!
- yummyfajitas 13y agoHe also mentioned that her father was "tall and muscular". What's the secret inner meaning of that? A few small details are enough to generate immersion. The fact that you believe they were lower middle class in spite of the fact that he didn't mention it suggests you created a mental picture. I did too - in my mind the man was black, white t-shirt, a bit of grease on it. That's how the mind works, and writers exploit it.
- Ended 13y ago"He was tall and muscular, a blue-collar type" A blue collar worker is lower class by definition. As phrased above, the "tall and muscular" bit is part of the writer's observation/stereotype that the man is a blue collar worker. "He was big and strong and (therefore) looked like someone who works in manual labour".
- yummyfajitas 13y agoBlue collar is manual work which is not the same thing as lower or lower middle class.
- tptacek 13y agoI don't think you seriously believe that this is an example of a writer simply trying to make the mental picture he was painting more vivid.
- yummyfajitas 13y agoLook, I read it totally differently than you did. I don't think the secret inner meaning is remotely as clear as you are making it out to be.
- tptacek 13y agoOK, I'll let it go.