It makes sense to get rid of most "ums" and "you knows?". For the most part they don't require judgment; most cases are just useless artifacts of speech. Remov

It makes sense to get rid of most "ums" and "you knows?". For the most part they don't require judgment; most cases are just useless artifacts of speech. Removing "these" from the a middle of a sentence is not nearly so easy. "These" generally refers to something and it can't be removed so easily just because an editor thinks that it can be. In this case, removing "these" changed the sentence to be a general statement about women from a statement amount a subset of women. This obviously should not be removed, regardless of the lack of a specific reference from "these". Leave the judgment to the reader.