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It's a little confusingly worded. There are two time periods being condensed in that cluster of sentences. T1 = when the kid first applied for college and told
by jonnathanson 13y ago
It's a little confusingly worded. There are two time periods being condensed in that cluster of sentences. T1 = when the kid first applied for college and told his father about wanting to go to Wake Forest, prompting the father's dismissive comments; T2 = when the son, now a freshman at the school, shows his parents around.
That last sentence is also a little sloppy in its pronoun use: "he" is referring to the father, when it could conceivably (as written) be referring to the son.
- corporalagumbo 13y agoThanks, that clears it up. I suppose we can't really complain about poor proofing, seeing as they are giving away this content for free.
- matthewowen 13y agoI can't really see a reason to object to the proofing - it seemed pretty clear to me that two points in time were being contrasted.