Thanks for your critique! I removed "and looking forward" as you noted it was lacking, and fixed the active tense issue that you noticed as well. As for your po

Thanks for your critique! I removed "and looking forward" as you noted it was lacking, and fixed the active tense issue that you noticed as well. As for your point about target market, I decided to focus on web development again, since that's really where my experience lies. I have never worked in a small business. I can't write honest copy that way.