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Just a couple of thoughts. If you're aiming for small, non-tech-savvy local businesses, I suggest shortening both the headline and the paragraphs. Say less, an
by adyus 13y ago
Just a couple of thoughts.
If you're aiming for small, non-tech-savvy local businesses, I suggest shortening both the headline and the paragraphs. Say less, and address their pain points directly ("My web apps will save you money. Here's how.")
Also, small business owners will likely not know what Github, AngelList, coderwall and such mean. You need to provide cases studies (perhaps with screenshots) and explain what you did, and how it increased revenue or saved money for your employers.
Lastly, are you tracking clicks on the Call To Action? How many visits are coming from your surrounding area? How can you increase that number?
Good luck!
- ulisesrmzroche 13y agoThanks for the critique! I launched v2 last night taking into consideration the feedback I got here. I decided to aim for tech-savvy startups and web design shops instead. I'm catching more leads this way. Next up, instead of the picture, I'm going to make an ember.js screencast explaining its convention over configuration design pattern and why this is going to be great for your business (see Ruby on Rails). I figured that will give keep the layout, and provide more value right off the bat, hopefully getting people to read on. What do you think?