It also kind of reads like a spam/form letter. Better(?): "Hi, I'm Colin, I'm moving to the Boston area and really interested in your start-up because..." The

It also kind of reads like a spam/form letter. Better(?): "Hi, I'm Colin, I'm moving to the Boston area and really interested in your start-up because..." Then talk about their technologies and ask any questions you have. Make it as little about you as possible, as people generally like to talk about themselves and their obsessions. Just act interested and engage. Don't even ask to tour the office, there is no point until you are well on your way to a job offer and ready to meet the team. Start-up offices are not interesting. ("Here's the whiteboard and our server room. Tom sits here to do code stuff"). Next step would be coffee, but only ask if you are genuinely interested and have ideas about the stuff that you've been talking about. It's a little like dating, you want to be mutually interesting. In that same way unless you are really hot/smart/interesting (i.e. extremely talented developer, for example), you will strike out a lot.