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she picks the second word of the first line, and give the page of that You've lost me. I think OP does it in a way that people don't have to guess at what he'
by dhimes 14y ago
she picks the second word of the first line, and give the page of that
You've lost me. I think OP does it in a way that people don't have to guess at what he's talking about, which is important (very important) when introducing an idea).
There are certain tweaks we can argue about to be sure, but I think this serves as an intro that everybody can "get." She's not securing a $100,000 account. If someone were to get interested in this and pursue more knowledge she would quickly realize that she couldn't use this algorithm to secure important accounts.
Note: I assume you mean that she picks the second word of the first line, looks that word up in the dictionary and gives the page number of that word.
- mseebach 14y agoJGC is a better writer than me - I did not suggest the exact language, just the structure of an alternative approach to the explanation that I think would make it simpler.
- dhimes 14y agoHe is also a better writer than I am. What I was trying to suggest is that picking an example that is easy to clearly write to is also very important for introductory vignettes. Otherwise, you're left trying to explain things that you weren't even trying to explain. (I've done this in class many times and it's a pain in the ass. You end up spending a fair amount of the class off topic.) I will note here, however, that in this thread OP agrees with you.