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Hi - Interesting concept. My first reaction was that the initial page is too wordy. I mean, I'm in software and I found it a somewhat difficult read. (I know i

Hi - Interesting concept. My first reaction was that the initial page is too wordy. I mean, I'm in software and I found it a somewhat difficult read. (I know it's not about the frontpage, but that's where I came in). I think you need a simple byline - e.g. "20:20 is all about X with Y"... Better yet, see if you can express this without text at all... Or have the minimal text, but have some images that invoke what you mean. I think the video is great, but I think some more fleshed out examples (not necessarily in the video) would help. Otherwise, I think it's an intriguing idea. Good luck with the concept!

pavlov 18y ago
Thanks a lot for the helpful comments! I removed some unnecessary sentences from the frontpage, but I guess it really needs a thoughtful rewrite to become easier to read. English isn't my first language, so I always feel like my English writing ends up contrived and doesn't quite grasp the natural flow of the language... The idea of using primarily images on the front page sounds really good, I'll ask the graphic designer to think about it (but it naturally depends on how soon she wants to spend her free time on this project again). Of course, if any of you native speakers feel like coming up with some better copy for this software, I'd be absolutely relieved to take your help :)