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I'm not a developer, but I read this article anyway. All of this blew me away. Like this "@mordaroso" fellow strolled on up, cocked his knee skyward, and jetti
by iamdave 14y ago
I'm not a developer, but I read this article anyway.
All of this blew me away. Like this "@mordaroso" fellow strolled on up, cocked his knee skyward, and jettisoned his leg into the rickety wooden door that previously sheltered my mind.
That was just great writing.
- mikeklaas 14y agoI have to disagree. "Jettison" does not fit the simile he was going for, at all.
- alecdbrooks 14y agoIt's not great, but it could be good. Replace "jettison" and cut the cliched "All of this blew me away" and the resulting paragraph is descriptive and fairly tight.
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- drakeandrews 14y agoJettisoning ones leg into a door sounds painful. Unless one has a prosthetic, then I must wonder why one is throwing it at a door. Do they not need it to stand?
- cpeterso 14y agoI disagree. I had to parse the sentence three times to make all the pieces fit. :\