This isn't wholly bad writing, but what he's published is really just an early draft: ~version 0.3 in the writing process, the point where you've meandered your

This isn't wholly bad writing, but what he's published is really just an early draft: ~version 0.3 in the writing process, the point where you've meandered your way through your early thoughts, lost direction and momentum, then squished all the loose ends and odd thoughts into a limp pseudo-conclusion, because you generally don't have anything clear to say in your mind the first time round. At this point I would be stepping back, taking some time to think about and deconstruct what and why I was exactly interested in in the first place, looking for the seeds of what really interests me. Then I'd strip it down to its fundamentals, generate a potential argument, do some more research, and start a new draft cycle. Usually I'm only getting to something I would consider publishing around 3.0 or 4.0. Or I've realised that the ideas didn't pan out and I've shelved the project - another very important skill for writers! Anyway putting in this extra effort is hard work but worth it, because otherwise your thoughts always come out like this: pretty, suggestive, but directionless. Basically people need to learn to be patient and not rush their ideas - a hard but necessary lesson in our times. (I usually edit most of my comments here multiple times: written and posted hastily, then subjected to extended consideration.)