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Like that time someone told us how to design a well-designed site in 30 minutes, I decided whilst clicking through "How to Write an Opening Sentence" that I wou
by heuristical 14y ago
Like that time someone told us how to design a well-designed site in 30 minutes, I decided whilst clicking through "How to Write an Opening Sentence" that I would read the first sentence and then decide whether I should listen to the guy on "how to write an opening sentence".
It read:
>"When I was a 25-year-old Senior Editor of The Mother Earth News, I did a lot of rewrite editing. "
I decided against it, so I didn't read any more of the post.
I will, however, tell you how you could write that sentence well:
"When I was 25, I spent three weeks figuring out how to get my articles to stay at a low reading angle, instead of getting flung back in my face by an impatient editor: the experience was invaluable, and it's time I shared how to write a good opening paragraph."
- munificent 14y ago> spent three weeks Unnecessary detail. > how to get my articles to stay at a low reading angle I don't know what this even means. What's a "low reading angle"? > instead of getting flung back in my face by an impatient editor This is factually incorrect. The author was the editor, and the person doing the flinging was the founder. > the experience was invaluable I'm not a fan of just blunting telling the reader "you should care about this". > it's time I shared how to write a good opening paragraph Redundant. The title of the article is "How to Write an Opening Sentence". I really don't think what you have here is an improvement.
- heuristical 14y agoyou don't even understand what I wrote. Try opening an issue of the new yorker or something. you can't understand a single opening paragraph - so the problem's with them, right? right?