I actually like B a lot more, and not for the reasons you cite. It's not that it's more "professional", whatever that means, but that it's shorter and more to t

I actually like B a lot more, and not for the reasons you cite. It's not that it's more "professional", whatever that means, but that it's shorter and more to the point. The A version is riddled with apologies and "but this" and "but that", lots of preconditions on what kind of work and conditions you'd be qualified for, etc. Overall, A is very convoluted.