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The first communicated a feeling. A brief flutter in the soul of a picture of recognition, painted for your mind's eye with care by the author. The second tran
by lljk_kennedy 29d ago
The first communicated a feeling. A brief flutter in the soul of a picture of recognition, painted for your mind's eye with care by the author.
The second transcribed considerable information bandwidth through intentionally structured word choice for maximal density.
- AnimalMuppet 29d agoYeah. The first one was like a minimalist painting, the second like a software specification. I'm pretty sure that the general public does not want to read software specifications.
- jimmaswell 29d agoI can't see how you could apply "minimalist" to that excerpt. It's maximalist, hammering the same point over and over and over when one or two examples with a little more worldbuilding per example would have done better if they were going for "evocative". If I had to pin a subjective experience to reading it, it would be that of being stuck in a car as a teenager with a parent who's ranting about whatever set them off that day and won't move on from repeating their grievance in different words when you got the point five minutes ago. In contrast, the second feels like having an enjoyable and productive level-headed conversation with someone who respects you and trusts you to understand the words.