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Notes from a copywriting point of view: (1) Switch the first two paragraphs: Nobody cares what shopialize.com is, but what problems it solves. (2) Remove the
by cschwarm 18y ago
Notes from a copywriting point of view:
(1) Switch the first two paragraphs: Nobody cares what shopialize.com is, but what problems it solves.
(2) Remove the passive voice of the second paragraph. Suggestion: "Tell your friends about new products and the best deals in town. Discover opportunities your friends have found. Review products and ask your friends before you buy."
(3) Remove "or login using Twitter" from the first action box. Move it to the "Register" page. Three options are confusing.
To be honest, I don't like the Sign Up Form on the front page. I'd remove it, distribute "Use Shopialize to..." on two columns, and repeat the action box "Take the tour or ...". I'd also add a box with testimonials (or a small list of the latest entries), and then show the last box.
I'd also animate the slideshow. I'm also wondering why you have no second password field to catch typos? Did I miss something?
Note that English is not my first language so correct the above suggestion if necessary.
- adityakothadiya 18y agoAll suggestions are valid, so I'll think about which changes will make sense or not. Thanks for your inputs.