>I'm a native English speaker that studied writing in university I am a native english speaker who had to unlearn OP's writing style to pass my tertiary educat

>I'm a native English speaker that studied writing in university I am a native english speaker who had to unlearn OP's writing style to pass my tertiary education. In particular I sat an english bridging course for non english speakers. I was often told off for "editorialising" and wasting space with useless descriptions.