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The writing here is horrendous. It sounds like a high school student in scholar mode, overloaded with "whereas", "however", and other "fancy talk"; ridiculous
by JasonFruit 14y ago
The writing here is horrendous. It sounds like a high school student in scholar mode, overloaded with "whereas", "however", and other "fancy talk"; ridiculous word-order inversions; and nested subordinate clauses. If it weren't interesting and reasonably well-researched, it would be impossible to finish.
- sbuk 14y agoWas about to post the same. This guy needs to read "Politics and the English Language" by George Orwell (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Politics_and_the_English_Language http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Politics_and_the_English_Langua...) and apply the 6 rules: 1. Never use a metaphor, simile, or other figure of speech which you are used to seeing in print. 2. Never use a long word where a short one will do. 3. If it is possible to cut a word out, always cut it out. 4. Never use the passive where you can use the active. 5. Never use a foreign phrase, a scientific word, or a jargon word if you can think of an everyday English equivalent. 6. Break any of these rules sooner than say anything outright barbarous.
- JasonFruit 14y agoThat's a great essay, and one I'm glad to have in my arsenal — I mean, glad to be able to recommend to others.