I think it does a great job of selling Instahero. Also I think if you cut out the excess words you get down to even more concise, compelling reading. So for e

I think it does a great job of selling Instahero. Also I think if you cut out the excess words you get down to even more concise, compelling reading. So for example your bold headers span several lines. You could go from... "You want to know the core metrics of your business at a glance" to "Core metrics in an instant" Repeat with other headers too. Simplify = amplify :)