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Clearer, and more succint: A lawsuit based on these claims would have no merit. Problems with the summation statement quoted: "At the end of the day" is super
by rprasad 14y ago
Clearer, and more succint:
A lawsuit based on these claims would have no merit.
Problems with the summation statement quoted:
"At the end of the day" is superfluous and pedantic.
"In this situation" is ambiguous and suggests that the statement only applies in the limited context of the facts raised in the letter, i.e., ignoring other potential facts which were not raised in the letter.
"just" is superfluous, pedantic, and unprofessional.
"a really bad idea" is superfluous, pedantic, and unprofessional. It is a really bad idea to use "a really bad idea" in a legal letter written to another lawyer.
- Tyrannosaurs 14y agoIt's bigger than having no merit as a lawsuit. The reason I like the phrase is that it encapsulates the fact that this is wrong legally, from a PR perspective, morally and that there's much to lose and little to gain.
- erehweb 14y agoAgree, but the letter is not just written to the other lawyer, but to the Internet community at large, including potential clients. That audience will react better to the more colloquial statement.
- lecodecivil 14y agoDude, quit with the legal editing. It's a reply letter, not a legal brief. The point is not to win in court, it's to intimidate the other side. Your version might be clearer and more succinct, but my eyes still glazed over by the end. And calling each component part of a plain-language sentence superfluous, pedantic, and unprofessional is itself superfluous, pedantic, and unprofessional. Pot, meet kettle.