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The writing here is atrocious. I bogged down in the 3rd paragraph and decided not to continue. Edit: Seriously, count the frequency of sentences that begin wit
by drharris 14y ago
The writing here is atrocious. I bogged down in the 3rd paragraph and decided not to continue.
Edit: Seriously, count the frequency of sentences that begin with "He", "But", "And". Sometimes parallel structure is not the way to go.
- leoh 14y agoI agree with you. I'm busy at the moment, by I think I'll come back later to see if it gets better. The editor may have had Hylton write a catchy, but inauthentic hook to draw readership.