Off-topic: Every new paragraph starting with an "I" comes off as distracting for the reader. Also the repeated use of "I would / wouldn't" makes it sound like i

Off-topic: Every new paragraph starting with an "I" comes off as distracting for the reader. Also the repeated use of "I would / wouldn't" makes it sound like it's a stylistic grip, but the sentences doesn't seem to be set up that way. Seeing as you're interested in improving your writing [0] I thought I should mention it. Apologizes in advance if this wasn't the right time and place for it :) 0: http://swombat.com/2010/12/6/get-better-at-writing http://swombat.com/2010/12/6/get-better-at-writing