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"HipBucket is the Doodle for online payments" was the first thing my eyes were drawn to, yet this sentence is difficult to process--maybe you could reword this?
by sniW 15y ago
"HipBucket is the Doodle for online payments" was the first thing my eyes were drawn to, yet this sentence is difficult to process--maybe you could reword this? It looks like a cool idea though!
- tmcls 15y agoWould "HipBucket - online payments inspired by Doodle" be better?
- ekpyrotic 15y agoI agree with the above poster. Importantly, Doodle isn't a strong enough brand to capture your point quickly and sharply. It's important to pay respect to Doodle; however, you need to capitalise on that first sentence. I think something more to the order of, "HipBucket lets you collect payments through a single link, safely and easily." edit: And obviously pay due respect to Doodle in a later sentence. And I love GoCardless.