I always feel that the original has a very implied period at the end of the first verse. My attempts: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=37629946 https://new

I always feel that the original has a very implied period at the end of the first verse. My attempts: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=37629946 https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=37629946