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This is my take at translating the original. Punctuation is my own but I think it reflects the original poem. The poet is a faker. He fakes so thorough
by jorl17 3y ago
This is my take at translating the original. Punctuation is my own but I think it reflects the original poem.
The poet is a faker.
He fakes so thoroughly
that he even fakes as pain
the pain he feels truly.
Or for a more liberal translation (aches=pain) that manages ABAB:
The poet is a man who fakes.
He fakes aches so completely
that he even fakes as aches
the aches he feels truly.
- jorl17 3y agoReplying to myself, can't edit (again). I eventually decided that in my previous comment we could replace "truly" with "sincerely" and it is, in my opinion, _miles_ better. I eventually also thought of a third one: The poet is a man who feigns. He feigns so thoroughly that he even feigns as pains the pains he feels sincerely. (If one has a problem with "man"/"he", this also works:) The poet is one who feigns. They feign so thoroughly that they even feign as pains the pains they feel sincerely.