> You have a great sense of enthusiasm for the story and you have clearly put a lot of effort into it Any reasonably acute listener will hear this as condescen

> You have a great sense of enthusiasm for the story and you have clearly put a lot of effort into it Any reasonably acute listener will hear this as condescension: “Oh, you worked so hard, bless your heart…”. I don’t think word-smithing the feedback to make it gentler really helps, because people (even bad writers) can see through bullshit. Better to treat the other person as deserving of honesty.