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I have no disagreement on the truthiness of words, my comment was really only about the enjoyment of your readers. Regardless, it sounds like you have a vision

by ggoo 3y ago

I have no disagreement on the truthiness of words, my comment was really only about the enjoyment of your readers. Regardless, it sounds like you have a vision for what you want your writing to be, and so far as I know, it's working well for you. As for feedback, since you asked, I'll be honest and say that it does read pretty boring... Very monotone with too many idioms. Feels like what you read from schoolchildren writing about a topic they're not really interested in. I'll also say, there's no _you_ in this writing. Reviewing the latest entry, "Practice and Experience" - no stories, metaphors, or even examples of real events to impress your point. People understand a lot through storytelling, often the only takeaway we will have will be a story or metaphor. More importantly though, they are an opportunity to identify with the reader and share something about you and your life. Apologies if that felt harsh.

bayindirh 3y ago
Thanks for your honest feedback. I greatly appreciate and value that, and there are no hard feelings, and no, it wasn't harsh. > I'll also say, there's no _you_ in this writing. It's intentional to remove myself from my writing, because it's not about me. I'm not trying to put myself out there, and say "look at me". These are distilled mind notes. A way of sharing what I learnt about life, without me. The writings I publish are intended to make readers to reflect themselves upon and see themselves, or get some personal insight about themselves or life. Maybe they also fascinated by this, or they never observed that angle about the life. If they think 5 seconds about the subject itself, that's nice. If they say it's boring, that's fine. On the other hand, what I'm sharing there is highly personal. It's just devoid of bells, whistles and blinkenlights. Much like a Dieter Rams or Bauhaus design, in a sense. > Feels like what you read from schoolchildren writing about a topic they're not really interested in. That's an interesting take. It's true that I'm not aiming for a literary tour de force there, but it's not true that I'm not interested in the subject, it's actually the contrary. The language is simplified to that point to make it straightforward and direct. Making indirect statements, and slowly approaching points while not quite touching them is very easily accomplished by constructing freight-train long sentences by chaining seldomly used vocabulary end to end with small punctuation marks, as if they were small fragile cotton strings knotted meticulously, and with care, if one decides to write in that way. However, writing with no fillers have a feel of density and directness, which makes things appear with no fanfare. It's up to the reader to process this "thing" they just encountered. > no stories, metaphors, or even examples of real events to impress your point. "Practice and Experience" is a distillation of at least two decades of observation and self-reflection. If I decided to add the stories and examples paved the way to the realizations made in that piece, it'd be a novella. Not that I remember every detail of it, either. That blog lives true to its tag line "tail -f /dev/brain0". When I understand something, I draft an entry. It sits and simmers for some time, refined occasionally, and when it reaches a density and purity I like, I publish. However, thanks again for your honest feedback. I'll be saving this.

by ggoo 3y ago

bayindirh 3y ago

Thanks for your honest feedback. I greatly appreciate and value that, and there are no hard feelings, and no, it wasn't harsh. > I'll also say, there's no _you_ in this writing. It's intentional to remove myself from my writing, because it's not about me. I'm not trying to put myself out there, and say "look at me". These are distilled mind notes. A way of sharing what I learnt about life, without me. The writings I publish are intended to make readers to reflect themselves upon and see themselves, or get some personal insight about themselves or life. Maybe they also fascinated by this, or they never observed that angle about the life. If they think 5 seconds about the subject itself, that's nice. If they say it's boring, that's fine. On the other hand, what I'm sharing there is highly personal. It's just devoid of bells, whistles and blinkenlights. Much like a Dieter Rams or Bauhaus design, in a sense. > Feels like what you read from schoolchildren writing about a topic they're not really interested in. That's an interesting take. It's true that I'm not aiming for a literary tour de force there, but it's not true that I'm not interested in the subject, it's actually the contrary. The language is simplified to that point to make it straightforward and direct. Making indirect statements, and slowly approaching points while not quite touching them is very easily accomplished by constructing freight-train long sentences by chaining seldomly used vocabulary end to end with small punctuation marks, as if they were small fragile cotton strings knotted meticulously, and with care, if one decides to write in that way. However, writing with no fillers have a feel of density and directness, which makes things appear with no fanfare. It's up to the reader to process this "thing" they just encountered. > no stories, metaphors, or even examples of real events to impress your point. "Practice and Experience" is a distillation of at least two decades of observation and self-reflection. If I decided to add the stories and examples paved the way to the realizations made in that piece, it'd be a novella. Not that I remember every detail of it, either. That blog lives true to its tag line "tail -f /dev/brain0". When I understand something, I draft an entry. It sits and simmers for some time, refined occasionally, and when it reaches a density and purity I like, I publish. However, thanks again for your honest feedback. I'll be saving this.