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She's a 17 year old girl. I'd be more worried if the language wasn't "cutesy". Lexi, don't change a thing. This document you've created encompasses who you are
by cbozeman 3y ago
She's a 17 year old girl. I'd be more worried if the language wasn't "cutesy".
Lexi, don't change a thing. This document you've created encompasses who you are right now and more importantly, where you are in your technical journey and understanding.
The tone is just fine the way it is. If you're compelled to "fix" something, just correct errors and call it a day.
- depressedpanda 3y agoYou both have a point. "Cutesy" language may act as a distraction to the reader, and -- like anything when overdone -- can be detrimental to the text. Kill your darlings and all that. _However_, if something isn't supposed to be a terse reference manual, it will convey a lighter tone and seem more approachable to most people, if used judiciously. I don't think anyone has enough experience at 17 to know where to strike the right balance, so overdoing it (and being called out for it) is just part of the journey of becoming a better writer while finding your own personal style and tone.
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- trogdor 3y agoI commented on this because I had to stop and sound out the word "alakablam." Simple writing wins every time. Better to learn that as a teenager than as an adult.