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There are some minor grammatical, stylistic, and phrasing issues: > From the dawn of times, people were writing. We have written using symbols, like in Ancient
by zerbinxx 3y ago
There are some minor grammatical, stylistic, and phrasing issues:
> From the dawn of times, people were writing. We have written using symbols, like in Ancient Egypt. And we have written using letters, like in Renaissance times
"From the dawn of time" is somewhat of a cliché in starting an argument, adding the "s" to "time" makes it a malapropism. This isn't a great way to start a post on the importance of writing. I would generally expect this to be phrased "Since the dawn of time". You, like many writers, have a tendency to over-signify the independence of clauses, leading to a bit of turbulence. Your second and third sentences could be phrased:
"We have written using symbols, like in Ancient Egypt, and we have written using letters, like in Renaissance times"
I'm not going to be a stickler about the "sentences shouldn't start with 'And'". This couplet isn't wrong per se, but the lack of specificity in your writing doesn't exactly scream "I know the history of the written lanuage!" Don't be afraid to be specific. In both the cases of Egypt and the Renaissance there were earlier cases of symbol-based and letter-based writing systems. Researching, naming them, and giving the reader that extra bit of context will make your writing more engaging.
There are also tense conflicts between these two sentences: one is firmly rooted in the past tense while the other lands in the present perfect tense. This is a big ol' nitpick but once you start really paying attention to tense you start to notice that tense-disagreement can make writing sound disjoint. One way this could be rephrased or improved upon is to focus on tense agreement and be more direct in what you're saying:
"Since at least 3400 years ago, people have used writing to communicate ideas. Ancient Egyptians and Mesopotamians had complex language systems that revolved entirely around the use of symbols. As language evolved, words and letters gave writers a near-infinite sandbox of concepts and tools with which to communicate. By the time of the Greeks, alphabetic languages like Aramaic, Hebrew, and Sanskrit were used the world over to preserve and communicate ideas."
A few more examples:
This is a big misconception, we all fall for. -> This is a big misconception that many software engineers fall for. (comma overuse) (unclear "we") (overgeneralization in using "all")
One simple way to write more–is to approach design reviews in a different way. Instead of hating them, and doing them like a homework assignment, try to approach them with enthusiasm -> One simple way to write more is to approach design reviews in a different way. Instead of hating them or treating them like a homework assignment, try to approach them with enthusiasm (hyphen misuse, comma overuse)
One last advice–abolish the copy-paste. So many developers, whom I mentored, simply copy-paste everything. Code snippets, function declarations, etc. I know how to initialize a git repository, because I do it by hand every time -> One last piece of advice: abolish the copy-paste. Many developers I have mentored simply copy-paste everything from code snippets to function declarations. I know how to initialize a git repository because I do it by hand every time. (comma overuse, hyphen misuse, unnecessary sentence snippet).
I would like to echo the other commenter that I really agree with the message here, and think it's illustrative that you're getting feedback on your writing after posting it here. If you never write, nobody will ever have the chance to give you feedback. Keep it up!
- benjaminwootton 3y agoHow do I learn to analyse and critique my own writing in this way? It’s broader than just grammar, more like rules for good writing which could almost be automated. Are there a set of rules or a good book I can refer to?
- zerbinxx 3y agoEats, Shoots & Leaves is a good one on punctuation. Dreyer’s English is a good recent one. Woe Is I is a classic. There are a lot of style guides and fun little books about grammar and editing. My partner is a editor at a publishing house so she guides me a lot on things like this. I’m not sure it can be automated, but the best things I can say I’ve learned about writing are: don’t do anything obviously wrong (grammatically, syntactically, factually), be concise/specific, and keep your purpose/relationship to the reader at the front of your mind.
- zero_shift 3y agoThere is a great book called _Style: Towards Clarity and Grace_. Any of Joseph Williams' other books will do if you can't get hold of that.
- Noumenon72 3y agoSteven Pinker's _The Sense of Style_ is good at grounding style rules in the actual evolved structures of human grammar. I also recommend the left-to-right, "topic position -> stress position" approach described in https://www.americanscientist.org/blog/the-long-view/the-science-of-scientific-writing https://www.americanscientist.org/blog/the-long-view/the-sci.... I care more about whether I am making the reader do unnecessary work than whether I am entertaining to read or whether my commas are spliced.