Sure! The biggest issue is the number of comma splices, which make many of your sentences feel jumbled and disjointed. Aside from that are many more innocent mi

Sure! The biggest issue is the number of comma splices, which make many of your sentences feel jumbled and disjointed. Aside from that are many more innocent mistakes: “at least” shouldn’t be hyphenated, “ancient” in “ancient Egypt” shouldn’t be capitalized, “one last advice” should be something like “one last piece of advice,” etc. And it could use a good proofing for stuff like “prefect” instead of “perfect” or “make to sense” instead of “make no sense.” But again, I really dig where you went with the article. I think you make a lot of good points and that your advice to learn by writing is great stuff. It could just use some polish.