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This post deserves a more appealing title - her name alone doesn’t really tell users anything about the article’s content. Something like “Mina Miller Edison,
by mock-possum 4y ago
This post deserves a more appealing title - her name alone doesn’t really tell users anything about the article’s content.
Something like “Mina Miller Edison, America’s first Home Executive” or “Straddling An Era: the life of Edison’s Partner & America’s Home Executive, Mina Edison”
(*I am not a copy writer)
- kwhitefoot 4y ago> Mina Miller Edison, America’s first Home Executive That doesn't tell me noticeably more than just her name does. It says that she was the first example of something I have never heard of. > Straddling An Era: the life of Edison’s Partner & America’s Home Executive, Mina Edison That's much better, it makes it clear that the Edison name is not merely a coincidence. At least it's better for me and I suspect that Edison the inventor is familiar to more people around he world than "Home Executive" whatever that is. Still, you have piqued my interest; now I'll try to find out what one is.
- mock-possum 4y agofor sure - given that she invented/popularized the term, I think it's a fun hook to let people's curiosity about the meaning lead them to read the article - but there's probably a more masterful way of crafting that hook. > Straddling An Era: The Life of Iconic Inventor Thomas Edison’s Steadfast Partner & America’s First Self-Styled Home Executive, Mina Edison Too wordy. Shit you know what, maybe this is a job for ChatGPT - what if I just ask it to make my title shorter > "Straddling An Era: The Life of Mina Edison, Thomas Edison's Partner" No mention of Home Executive though. What if I just ask it to title the article? > "Mina Edison: The Brain Behind the Wizard of Menlo Park" Eh, but that kind of implies she was the one with the science smarts, not Edison - which isn't really what we're going for. I do kinda like the cheeky reference to Edison 'the wizard of menlo park' without explicitly mentioning Thomas Edison. > "Beyond the Wizard: How Mina Edison Revolutionized the American Household" That's actually interesting. Still not perfect, but does seem like a 'better' title than just her name.