You made a few unforced errors that move it away from the quietly authoritative, mirror-sheen AI voice. The colon in line 1 is clunky, the combination of "but"

You made a few unforced errors that move it away from the quietly authoritative, mirror-sheen AI voice. The colon in line 1 is clunky, the combination of "but" and "with" in line 2 reads as passive, and line 3 is full person.