It would be much better to own up the pitch upfront. Like, start with a line at the top saying something like "We at Garmin believe it's essential for our produ

It would be much better to own up the pitch upfront. Like, start with a line at the top saying something like "We at Garmin believe it's essential for our products to be easy to use, and can be lifesaving. Here's a story that shows what we mean... " Instead the content _reads_ like a story about someone about to lose their life at sea. It's not a big lift but would likely make a big change to the perception I (and apparently others) have of this piece.