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I don't want to beat up on you. I admire your tenacity and entrepreneurism. You also have a good idea with Grooovy. But I gotta tell you man, the copywriting o

by basixx 15y ago

I don't want to beat up on you. I admire your tenacity and entrepreneurism. You also have a good idea with Grooovy. But I gotta tell you man, the copywriting on the website is bloody awful. Some of the worst I've ever read. Nonsensical cliches like "breaking barriers" and "in the driver's seat" look amateurish and discredit your app. You didn't think to get a Copywriter's opinion? Rewrite the page, or better yet, contact someone who can for a decent rate. My email is in my profile if your interested (I'm a copywriter).

secoif 15y ago
If you're going to call yourself a copywriter, you should probably make sure you don't have any errors in the copy you're using to promote that. Oh, the irony.
Sukotto 15y ago
If you don't mind some feedback... Instead of harshing on the OP, making him find your email, and beg for help, don't you think a more proactive approach would be more valuable to the conversation? Like the following, for instance. - "As a copywriter, I see quite a few common mistakes on your landing page. I took a few minutes and made a first pass at cleaning it up. (Find a before/after article on my blog here: [link] ) I'm happy to help you improve your (or any HNer's) site copy. Drop me a line to discuss. Email's in my profile" - This more proactive approach is far more likely to actually help someone. Based on others who have offered non-programming services/advice on HN, it seems likely to lead to some freelance/consulting work should you desire some. Make it clear that you only spent 5/10/15 minutes on your draft. That sets expectations about quality, while still showing people how much better things could be with help from a real copywriter. Food for thought.
- basixx 15y ago
  I'm on my iPhone. In bed with a bad cold. I also don't do work for free (unless it's a charity I have selected). I appreciate your suggestions nonetheless.

by basixx 15y ago

secoif 15y ago

If you're going to call yourself a copywriter, you should probably make sure you don't have any errors in the copy you're using to promote that. Oh, the irony.

Sukotto 15y ago

If you don't mind some feedback... Instead of harshing on the OP, making him find your email, and beg for help, don't you think a more proactive approach would be more valuable to the conversation? Like the following, for instance. - "As a copywriter, I see quite a few common mistakes on your landing page. I took a few minutes and made a first pass at cleaning it up. (Find a before/after article on my blog here: [link] ) I'm happy to help you improve your (or any HNer's) site copy. Drop me a line to discuss. Email's in my profile" - This more proactive approach is far more likely to actually help someone. Based on others who have offered non-programming services/advice on HN, it seems likely to lead to some freelance/consulting work should you desire some. Make it clear that you only spent 5/10/15 minutes on your draft. That sets expectations about quality, while still showing people how much better things could be with help from a real copywriter. Food for thought.

basixx 15y ago
I'm on my iPhone. In bed with a bad cold. I also don't do work for free (unless it's a charity I have selected). I appreciate your suggestions nonetheless.