It suffers from overuse of commas which tends to be because the author uses them to communicate how they read it in their head (particularly how they paused on

It suffers from overuse of commas which tends to be because the author uses them to communicate how they read it in their head (particularly how they paused on beats whilst reading for effect). Obviously there's an error at the end ("will fail" should be "from failing"). It suggests to me an author who is not experienced at writing, quote possibly due to having English as a second language.