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Yeah, completely valid points and I accept the criticism / suggestions with open arms, so thank you! I learned a lot from your comment. I was definitely stabbi
by whatrocks 4y ago
Yeah, completely valid points and I accept the criticism / suggestions with open arms, so thank you! I learned a lot from your comment.
I was definitely stabbing into the dark with (and self-conscious about) the "distance" - how to make it close enough for curiosity but not outright danger.
Some of the laser + vacuum chunking details I was hopefully going to toss up to the somewhat unreliable (at least not fully informed) narrator, which I was definitely using as a crutch for not having better science details.
This is also part of a "write a short story every week for a year" project, so my research was definitely too limited. But maybe now I'll revisit it in 2023 with your suggestions. Thanks again!
- eesmith 4y agoGlad to have helped, rather than come across as too harsh. Just realized another thing. The Chelyabinsk meteor was about 20 m (66 ft). That's larger than your "Dodge Durango-sized asteroid". So I don't think it would be detected, much less worries about hitting the Earth - a <5m size of asteroid hits the Earth pretty often. (Example: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/2008_TC3 https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/2008_TC3 ) ʻOumuamua, which is the first interstellar object detected passing through the Solar System, is an estimated 100-1000 meters, as a guess. 2I/Borisov is also in the 100+ meter range.
- whatrocks 4y agoYeah! I felt squishy about the asteroid size, too. I really just wanted to say “Dodge Durango-sized” TBH, but was definitely concerned it was too small. Another good catch / call-out! Thanks.
- eesmith 4y agoNo worries. It was a good line. I also liked the casual mention of the second civil war.