Great points. My mic literally dropped during the recording (I was sitting in my bed). I'll try to fix that now and re-upload it (up to this point, the only reg

Great points. My mic literally dropped during the recording (I was sitting in my bed). I'll try to fix that now and re-upload it (up to this point, the only regular listeners have been my parents and occasionally my wife). Also, excellent call on the problem/game part of the story - I should rewrite that part. I've also been thinking about this story as the backstory to an iPhone game, so maybe I can make it more fun that way.